Kia ora readers,
Today I am going to be showing you my Tree house descriptive writing. What we had to do is look at 2 pictures which was a spaceship and a tree house. We had to pick a picture and I choose the tree house. Then we had to open this document that Whaea Miki has made and shared with us on our room 9 site. We had to do 5 senses of what we could see, hear, feel, taste, and hear. Then we had to do our character. Here is my writing. Please don't forget to comment on my blog post.
One morning I was walking back from school . I smelled the animal poop very bad.As I was walking I fell in a hole it took me to a Te Ngahere. I look up at the tree and I saw that there was a tree house in the tree.I could spilled lots of rotten flesh by the tree house.then was bugs all over me then I went into the tree house.It was brown and blue.then it was getting dark so I was going to go home but i got lost on the way home so I went back to the tree house.I got my Sleeping bag out of my bag it was a blue and red.I went to go and make my bed to sleep on with my sleeping bag .It was the morning I got up at 5:20 to fine my way home form the tree house I did not fine my way home so I went back to the tree house. I was a very chatty person I have curly brown shoulder length.the end
Thank you Myla for a great story.You succeeded in using your descriptive words.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time you could re-read your work before pressing ok as there is some punctuation missing.
Having it in the right place will make it easier to read your work and will also make your work look neater.