Hello guys,
This term we have been learning to write narrative stories. The purpose of a narrative is to entertain the reader.
First we had to make a plan about a made up story.
Then we had to write a story
We had to include language features and describing words
One of my favorite sentences is As we strolled into the house it was like icy snow. We could not feel our legs as we wandered.
One thing I could improve on is include more describing words.
Please read my story and leave me a comment! Have a good day!
Abandoned House in
The creepy woods
Thank you for an interesting story Myla.It ended differently to how I thought it was going too.I thought the girls were going to keep the dog.I'm glad that they gave it back as I am sure that is what the dog would of wanted.
ReplyDeleteI have just seen you and Lorna bike/scooter passed.You are very active and obviously enjoy each others company:)
I am just leaving this comment to let you know that I have checked out your blog today.
ReplyDeleteHave a great week.
Hello Mrs Cassidy
DeleteThank you for checked out my blog post I hope you have a good day
Hello Myla,Thank you for sharing your work with everyone. I like how you added what was the color of the dog. Next time you should add more describing words. Have a great day!
ReplyDeleteHi Jherean
Deletethank you for commenting on my blog and next I will add more describing words. Have a great day 😆😀😄
Kia ora Myla,
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you put on your story "It was 12:00" it gives a kind of spooky day like halloween.When you put abandoned house it gives me a spooky picture in my mind I hope you have a great day!
Kia Makayla
DeleteThank you for commenting in my blog i like how it gives you a spooky picture picture in you mind i hope you have a good day bye.
Hi myla,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your amazing work with us. I really like the way you put on your story "it was 12:OO" it give a kind of spooky day like Halloween. When you put abandoned house it hives me a spooky picture in my mind.I hope we can have our play day tomorrow on Saturday. wear something pretty so we can have our play day and have some of the big ice cream that I told you about. Just ask your mum first if she agree and if she does not then we wont have our good play day. Please ask your mum if you can come tomorrow